Article 7 Comments: Pretty minimal, almost telegraphic style, which limits the amount of information you give us here. When asked about the research questions, you don't really tell us; you just make a statement. In fact they were looking specifically at how those "habits of mind" are addressed in virtual worlds, something you don't even mention. In discussing the lit review, you leave out most of it. How about everything from Dewey up to us? Is it on point? Since you don't tell us the research question, how do we gauge the relevance? In the methods, you never mentioned that this was a survey of WoW gamers. Doesn't that seem at all important?

Similarly the results could have been discussed much more fully. There's more nuance here, isn't there?

The review does get more interesting in y our last section. The problem remains that you raise some interesting issues and questions but then give us very little information about it. I would have liked you to expand on these thoughts considerably.

Article 6 Comments: Well, I'm reading these reviews "backwards," but this one is much more complete than the review of Article 7. You still need some more information about the results. When you discuss the conclusions, I think you you could have been a bit more critical. The authors go beyond their data in their discussion, so your job is, at least partly, to evaluate those claims. And I would have (again) liked you to elaborate on your final section. What lessons does this specific study have for online learning? If trying to teach/force people to use RL strategies didn't work here, what might work? How would you test that? How did this study show that giving people autonomy benefit them? Was that a finding of this study or an interpretation or hypothesis that arises from it that would need to be tested? The article on adaptive guidance made the point that people do not make good use of learning control.

You need to spend more time getting into the nitty-gritty of these articles. Your first sentence here is quite promising, but you needed to follow it up with some information and definitions: what are ill-structured domains? what is the common failure of other instructional systems? Inquiring minds want to know! The research questions in particular are not presented as questions, or even as complete sentences, making it all kind of hard to follow.

You don't include the full citation, so that one might later find and read the paper. Also, what are the numbers that are included in a couple of places? Are they page numbers? Something else? They aren't exclusively connected with quotations, which is ordinarily what one uses page numbers for.

I like the idea of a systematic theory of hypertext design, or at least I did, since much of the interest in hypertext for instruction as waned. Information mapping is another system presented at one time as a way to structure and design hypertext. It is much more along the lines of direct instruction, however, so it might be interesting to compare the two. Are there other such theories out there?

What are the older theories that you believe underlie this? What research would make you buy into CFT more? You mention that you still have other questions. What are they?

The review of "Principles and practical grouping for the use of drill and practice programs" was pretty good, but be careful about how you word things. You state in the lit review section that research has shown that "young children work better individually" but is that really the conclusion?It was found that they tend to achieve/learn more, but is that the same as "working better?" The latter implies (to me, anyway) a process--how they worked while using the programs--while the achievement is the product. You need to make sure that you don't change the terms of the argument while summarizing it.

Good description of the methods, although it would have also been good for you to have evaluated them. And in the results, the individuals outperformed the pairs only in a very specific way, not overall, right?

Your final questions are good ones and need to be asked: when do we start using computers for education? what effects will that have?